A Pale Comparison

This is the corrected version. i like writting poems for my wife. but at times i find myself befundled with all the joy and beauty that is her. whats funny is that i wrote this one fairly quickly in comparison to my first sonnet. took me about four or five hours with all revisions and everything. my first sonnet must have taken thirty revisions, like a day or two of work to write it and learn the code. not good, but not bad for my second sonnet? A Pale Comparison --- My words will swell upon the task to write you With ink of gold that strains to shine your beauty As I'm to tame a zoo of joy to come to A bliss evoking love that feeds my duty How must I write the art in all your glory The way your sunset curves elate my senses With skin to boast of silk and smooth in story To tell the awe of you as I'm defenseless You see your spell will tease and grant me splendor Your eyes amaze with brilliance that is healing Your soul will flow with love as I surrender My soul as you enrich and surge my feelings The awe of you is what I tried to capture Your beauty shines with power to enrapture